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The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

#requests #formations #tourist #office #kingdom #january #june #information #features #comparison
The line graph
provide
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provides
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 information about the three methods( in
person
, by lettle/e-mail, by telephone) of contacting a tourist office between
January
 and
June
 in
UK
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the UK
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.
Overall
, the methods of
in
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in-person
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person
 and by telephone
get
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are
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the
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apply
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increasing
trend
,
while
 the people who
request
 by letter or e-mail experience a drop. In
January
, the
request
 in
person
 is the less popular among other methods, about 400 times. The
trend
 rose gradually to 800 in March and had
significant
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a significant
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 increase to around 1900 in
June
. The
people
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number of people
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request
 for information by
person
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the person
a person
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 was 900 in
January
, and decreased slightly to 800 in
Feburary
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February
. The
trend
 levelled off between March and April and reached a peak of 1600 in
June
. It can be seen that the
request
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requests
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 by letter and e-mail had a decreasing
trend
. In
January
, it stood at around 800 and declined mildly to about 700. The data kept going
dnow
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down
 to just below 400 in May
,
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apply
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 and stayed
unchange
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unchanged
 during
June
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words person, january, june, trend, request with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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