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Some people feel that it will be better for society and individuals if driverless cars are widely used. Others are not in favour of the same. Discuss both the point of views and give your opinion.

#people #society #individuals #driverless #cars #favour #point
We are living in the world of technology. Robots and other machines replace
human
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. It is not different in driving. Most
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motor companies are studying
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 and some of them are already used.
Driverless
cars
 could lessen the stress that people get from driving
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 and
also
 help to decrease accidents.
However
, some
poeple
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people
 argue that it
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 not yet
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to
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the practical level to use and
driverless
cars
 could take some professional
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job
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. On the one hand, some insist that
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driverless
car
 technology is not yet matured, we have a long way to go.
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, I read an article about
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imperfectness
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 of
auto driving
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cars
. In that article,
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 wrote
driverless
cars
could't
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could
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obstracle
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obstacle
if
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 human or just a trash can. It means
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driverless
cars
 are under
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 of
car
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.
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 we should think about
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unemployment
 rates. A number of drivers could
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 their
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due to
driverless
cars
, which can lead individual drivers to worse living.
On the other hand
,
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others argue that
driverless
cars
 will help not only per person but
also
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 society. For
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, it helps
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traffic
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 and
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car
 accidents. Most of us already know that
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large portion of
car
 accidents
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made
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 by human risk.
Likewise
,
traffic
 jams
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 from
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 calculation of
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Driverless
cars
 could solve all of these
traffic
 problems,
driverless
cars
 could calculate
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 way by communicating with other
cars
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traffic
 control system.
Lastly
, it will increase social productivity by
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making
makin'
 people do other things using driving time.
For instance
, I spend 2 hours
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a day
by
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driving to commute. If I could use
driverless
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car
, I
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 study language or other things to increase life quality.
To sum up
, there are both warm and cold views
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driverless
cars
. Among them, its strength touches me better. We are already living with many other
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 items which will
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 us. Individuals could feel free from driving and society could get advantages from increased productivity of their labor.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. **Autonomous Vehicles** - A term referring to driverless or self-driving cars.
  • 2. **Human Error** - Mistakes made by people while driving, often leading to accidents.
  • 3. **Traffic Congestion** - Overcrowded roadways, often resulting in slower movement.
  • 4. **Mobility Solutions** - Transportation options for individuals who have difficulty moving around.
  • 5. **Emissions** - Pollutants released into the air by vehicles.
  • 6. **Technical Reliability** - The dependability of the technology to function as intended.
  • 7. **Job Displacement** - The loss of jobs due to new technology or automation.
  • 8. **Cyber-attacks** - Attempts by hackers to gain unauthorized access to computerized systems.
  • 9. **Liability** - Legal responsibility for something, often in the context of accidents or damages.
  • 10. **Ethical Considerations** - Moral issues that arise regarding the fairness and implications of decisions.
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