The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The two plans illustrate the development that has taken place on roadway access around a municipal hospital from 2007 until 2010 with
label
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and pictures. At first glance,
it is clear that
there had been several construction of public facilities around the hospital, including bus
station
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and
car
parks which are located along the roads. The hospital
road
which connected the city
road
and ring
road
, had been added with two roundabouts.
Moreover
, on the west side of the hospital
road
, the trees along the
road
had been cut down to make place for a bus station which connected to the two roundabouts.
In addition
, the former employee and public
car
park had been turned into staff only
car
park by cutting down the trees located on the east side of the hospital
road
.
Nonetheless
, a public
car
park had been built on the west side of the hospital.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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