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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#films #five #countries #three #years #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The bar graph presents the figures
of
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 films that
was
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 created between 2007 to 2009 in five countries.
Overall
,
country
 A has the highest recorded film in
all time
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 in all
category
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,
meanwhile
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country
 E were
steadily
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 throughout the
year
 with around 10%.
Country
 B started to
produced
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 films
around
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at around
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 50% and
maintain
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 it until the
succeding
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year
 and it peaked in 2009
with
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 approximately 60%.
Country
 C
,
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 started around 10% and slowly increased until the final
year
 with around 20%. Meanwhile,
country
 A started to
peaked
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 in 2007 and 2008, with approximately 90% respectively and decreased
around
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 10% in 2009.
Country
 D,
strated
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started
around
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 20% and fluctuated the next
the
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year
 and increased in the following
year
with
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 around 17%.
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