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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course.The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the destination of Anthropology graduates from one university. And the table compares after 5 years of work how much was their
salaries
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.
It is clear that
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 about half of the graduates
majored
Correct pronoun usage
who majored
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 in Anthropology worked full-time
job
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jobs
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.
On the other hand
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, most of them
recieved
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received
 high
salaries
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 after working for 5 years. After finishing their
undergradate
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undergraduate
 degree in Anthropology, 52% of them work full-time, which is significantly higher
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then
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than
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orther
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other
 figures. The following
destination
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destinations
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 are part-time workers and
unemplyed
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unemployed
 people, with 15% and 12% respectively. The remaining parts are people who worked and
studyed
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studied
 at the same time, with both 8% and the unknown figure (5%). Among all the graduates working for 5 years, a large proportion of their incomes were higher
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then
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than
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 $75000. For freelance consultants and
government
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the government
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 sector, 80% of their
salaries
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 were higher than $75000, with 50% of the government sector
earned
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earning
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 more than $100000.
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While people
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People
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 whose
salaries
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 were less than $50000
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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account for little part
for
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of
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 all 3
type
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types
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 of employment, which are 5% for both freelance consultants and
government
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the government
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 sector and 10% for private companies workers.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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