Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitariyen relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that rich

countries

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must support the poor ones with

humanitariyen

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humanitarian

help in case of a natural

catastrophy

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catastrophe

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essay agrees with that because wealthy

countries

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can afford it and some of these disasters are caused by

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wealthy nations.

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with, it is of

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paramount importance to be aware that wealthy nations with a stable financial phase will not be affected by helping a country in need.

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there

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access to a very important amount of

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, volunteers and

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as doctors,

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countries

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will not be affected financially. As a wealthy country, it is important to show solidarity in emergencies to those who need it the most. It is publicly known that most

countries

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with a high status send

immediatlly

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immediately

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help in past

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catastrophies

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catastrophes

like the

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earthquake

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morocco

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year and the flood in other poor

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, it is

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noticeable

that in the

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few

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the number and level of

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catastrophies

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catastrophes

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decreased dramatically because of

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global warming and

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climate change. Despite

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the fact that wealthy

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are usually the most

effected

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affected

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catastrophies

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catastrophes

, they are not the ones that

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the majority of the time

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globale

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global

warming.

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countries

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that are rich

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a result of

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development that sadly sometimes

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affect

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the world negatively with the result of a

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catastrophe

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countries

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that are the least prepared for it. In conclusion, it should be an obligation for the wealthiest nations to support and send help to poor

countries

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in emergencies. It would not be an issue affording the

humanitarien

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humanitarian

aid as it is important to focus on the fact that they contributed

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the cause of

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catastrophies

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catastrophe

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Revise the essay for spelling errors and typos. Words like 'humanitariyen,' 'catastrophy,' and 'noticibale' should be corrected.

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Provide more relevant and specific examples to strengthen arguments. Mention specific instances where wealthy nations offered humanitarian aid effectively.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. You might want to use more transitional phrases and connectors to enhance coherence.

coherence cohesion

Some points lack depth and need further explanation, such as how specifically wealthy nations contribute to global warming or their financial stability.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the essay's main arguments.

task achievement

The essay provides a complete response to the task, covering the necessity and rationale behind wealthy countries offering aid.

task achievement

The argument that wealthy nations can afford to support poorer ones in times of need is clearly presented.

coherence cohesion

The structure of the essay is logical, starting from the state of wealthy nations to the moral obligation they have.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

284 words

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