The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.
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The following picture illustrates the process of generating
electricity
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in a hydroelectric
power
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site. It can be seen that generally, the hydroelectric
power
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site consists of a
dam
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and a
power
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station
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. Interestingly, the
station
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's function generates
electricity
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during the
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day time
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daytime
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only.
Firstly
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, when
river
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the river
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reaches the
dam
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, the
water
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is collected
behide
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behind
the
dam
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which is a high-level
reservoir
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. There is an intake under the
dam
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which is open during the
day
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time to let the
water
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flow to
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Power
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the Power
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station
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.
Then
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, the
water
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enters the
power
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station
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,
spining
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spinning
the reversible turbines which cause the generator to operate. Once the generator starts to operate, it can produce
electricity
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. Afterwards,
this
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electricity
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is transformed to
national
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the national
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grid through
power
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lines.
Finally
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, as the
water
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continues its path, it enters the low-level
reservoir
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.
On the other hand
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, a reverse process
occurres
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occurs
occurred
in the hydroelectric
power
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station
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at night. Primarily, the
water
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travels from
low-level
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the low-level
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reservoir
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to the reversible turbines, where these turbines pump
water
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up into the high-level
reservoir
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. As the intake is closed during the night,
water
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is saved in the high-level
reservoir
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. The entire procedure, which
explained
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is explained
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abow
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above
, starts over
in
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apply
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the next
day
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, producing energy every
day
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, dam, station, day, water, reservoir with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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