The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major citites with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparison where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major citites with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparison where relevant.
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The table illustrates the details of subway
systems
in six different cities. It is noteworthy that the station with the most
passengers
annually is in Tokyo,
while
Kyoto has the lowest number of
passengers
. The oldest built underground metro is the one located in London. Despite having the longest route, at 394 km, among the other railway
systems
, it
is
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only
accomodate
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accommodate
775
passengers
yearly. The other two
systems
built decades after the one in London are in Paris and Tokyo. Tokyo holds the most number of
passengers
, accounting for 1927
millions
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a year, followed by Paris's railway -- lay on half
length
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the length
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of London's route -- carries as many as 1191
passengers
. Washington DC has another old underground subway system which was built in 1976. It extends to 126 km of route to take on 144 million
passengers
.
In contrast
from
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the other countries, Kyoto and Los Angeles have
relative
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short routes metro
systems
, and accommodate less than 100 million
passengers
annually, at 45 and 50, respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words systems, passengers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway systems
  • date opened
  • kilometres of route
  • passenger numbers per year
  • summarise
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
  • oldest
  • recent additions
  • route length
  • network
  • transport
  • massive
  • annually
  • comparatively shorter
  • follows closely behind
  • lowest number
  • second highest
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