100 years ago, it was felt that the human race was making progress in all areas of life. Nowadays, there is less certainty that this is the case. In what areas do you think that the most progress has been made so far? In what area are more things needed to be done?

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task achievement

Key points such as areas with significant progress and those requiring more work should be clearly delineated. Currently, the essay focuses primarily on technological advancement, but doesn't mention other areas or areas needing improvement.

coherence cohesion

Organize ideas into paragraphs for a clearer structure. Currently, there's no clear separation between different points. An essay structure generally includes an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. Each paragraph should also have a topic sentence that introduces the main idea of the paragraph.

task achievement

Provide specific examples to support each point. For instance, when discussing technological advancements, mentioning smartphones or the internet in addition to TVs would strengthen your argument.

task achievement

You've identified technological advancement as a key area of progress, which is a strong and relevant point.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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2 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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