Some people think they have the right to use as much water as they wan. Others, however, believe that the government should control the use of fresh water as it is a limited resource. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Water
is very important for our daily life
, some people
think they have the right to use
water
, but others thinks
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think
people
should under
control to Add a missing verb
be under
use
water
. For me, I think everyone should awareness
to save Replace the word
be aware
the
Correct article usage
apply
water
and government
can pass some laws to control the Correct article usage
the government
use
of water
.
Nowadays, many people
think they can use
as much water
as they want, they deem be
restricted Unnecessary verb
apply
water
use
is lost their personalty
. Correct your spelling
personality
Water
is essential for life
, some person use
water
for their daily activities, such
as drinking, swimming
and for their hobbies. Correct word choice
and swimming
Also
some individuals think Add a comma
Also,
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the government
government
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government's
limited
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limiting
their
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apply
water
usage is violated
their freedom, they don’t like the feeling of being restricted and some Wrong verb form
violates
people
fear if government
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the government
limited
their Wrong verb form
limits
life
quality will decrease.
However
, I would argue that people
all need awareness to save water
and save
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saving
water
is a good way for our later generations. Currently
we have a lot of Add a comma
Currently,
environment
problems, Replace the word
environmental
water
reduction is one of them. We need to think about our offspring, they need more Correct word choice
and water
resource
. So the Fix the agreement mistake
resources
government
can pass some laws to control the use
of fresh water
, the
public Correct word choice
and the
need
some rewards and punishments. Change the verb form
needs
Government
Add an article
The government
also
can promote
fair distribution, particularly in drought Wrong verb form
promotes
area
. By Fix the agreement mistake
areas
management
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managing
resource
, Fix the agreement mistake
resources
government
can Add an article
the government
priority
essential needs like drinking and agriculture. Replace the word
prioritise
This
way that
all the Correct word choice
apply
people
can have access water
, Fix the infinitive
to water
it
can make sure more Correct word choice
and it
people
have a good life
.
In conclusion, water
is a limited resource not only for us, but for future generations we need to save water
. Government
can give some rewards to Correct article usage
The government
make
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give
public
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the public
have
motive power to follow the laws.Unnecessary verb
apply
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Ensure you provide clear and specific examples to reinforce your points. This helps illustrate your arguments effectively.
coherence cohesion
Work on sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity and readability of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction clearly presents the main idea and your stance on the issue.
task achievement
You have effectively highlighted both sides of the argument in your discussion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite