Some people think they have the right to use as much water as they wan. Others, however, believe that the government should control the use of fresh water as it is a limited resource. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Water
is very important for our daily
life
, some
people
think they have the right to
use
water
, but others
thinks
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people
should
under
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control to
use
water
. For me, I think everyone should
awareness
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to save
the
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water
and
government
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the government
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can pass some laws to control the
use
of
water
. Nowadays, many
people
think they can
use
as much
water
as they want, they deem
be
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restricted
water
use
is lost their
personalty
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.
Water
is essential for
life
, some person
use
water
for their daily activities,
such
as drinking,
swimming
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and for their hobbies.
Also
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some individuals think
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the government
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government
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limited
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their
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water
usage
is violated
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their freedom, they don’t like the feeling of being restricted and some
people
fear if
government
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the government
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limited
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their
life
quality will decrease.
However
, I would argue that
people
all need awareness to save
water
and
save
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water
is a good way for our later generations.
Currently
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we have a lot of
environment
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problems,
water
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and water
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reduction is one of them. We need to think about our offspring, they need more
resource
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. So the
government
can pass some laws to control the
use
of fresh
water
,
the
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public
need
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some rewards and punishments.
Government
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also
can promote
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fair distribution, particularly in drought
area
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. By
management
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resource
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,
government
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the government
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can
priority
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essential needs like drinking and agriculture.
This
way
that
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all the
people
can have access
water
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,
it
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and it
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can make sure more
people
have a good
life
. In conclusion,
water
is a limited resource not only for us, but for future generations we need to save
water
.
Government
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can give some rewards to
make
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public
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the public
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have
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motive power to follow the laws.
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coherence cohesion
Your introduction clearly presents the main idea and your stance on the issue.
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You have effectively highlighted both sides of the argument in your discussion.

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