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The chart below shows percentages of young people choosing different ways to solve the global warming in four different countries in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows percentages of young people choosing different ways to solve the global warming in four different countries in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of youngsters by
choose
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chose
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 numerous ways to combat climate change and
global
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the global
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 warming
problem
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problems
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 in
the
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apply
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Portugal,
Poland
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,Romania and Holand in 2008. The majority of young people showed interest in Portugal in all types.
However
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,Romanian folks showed less interest. Individuals of Portugal most used lifestyle methods with the help of government and modern
technology
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 to uproot the problem with a majority of nearly 40 % in all the sectors.
In addition
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,Romania took part in every method but never crossed 20 % in every way.
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,
Government
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the Government
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 way was too popular in
Poland
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 and Portugal ,but advanced
technology
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only
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was only
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 famous in Portugal.All four countries
also
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 paid attention
other
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to other
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 ways to solve the problem with nearly 25%.
Although
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technology
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the technology
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 method was
uncomman
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uncommon
 in
Poland
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.
To sum up
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, Romania and
Poland
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 focused more on
technology
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as well as
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 lifestyle,
while
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 Portugal focused only on lifestyle to combat Global warming.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words poland, technology with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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