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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket(S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket(S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The diagram illustrates the two proposed
supermarket
 layouts of a town called Garlsdon in the future. In general, in two plans the new
supermarket
 is planned to
locate
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 near the railway and main roads.
In addition
, housing and
industy
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industrial
 areas are not far from the
supermarket
 for both options. It is clearly seen that the
supermarket
 in option 1 is planned to stay in the countryside of the north-west.
While in
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In
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 option 2 the site is constructed in
town
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the town
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center
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centre
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, where
is
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there is
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 no traffic zone.
And it
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It
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 is
also
 covered by industry areas
of
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in
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 the south of the town.
Moreover
, the difference between
two
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the two
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location
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locations
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 is
the
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that
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 site 1 will be built near
to
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apply
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Hindon with around 10,000 citizens, and about 12 km distance.
Whereas the
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 site 2 will be located in the middle of 2 populated areas,
bransdon
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Brandon
Branson
 and
cransdon
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Cransdon
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, about 16km and 29 km distance respectively, with around 45,000 people.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words supermarket with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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