Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is undeniable that in
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this
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modern days,
techonology
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technology
has been a big help to
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society. Some
people
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believe
technology
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bring
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brings
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positive effects for
people
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.
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others
also
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believe that
technology
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also
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bring
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some negative
effect
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effects
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to
people
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.
This
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essay will try to explain both sides. First of all, in
this
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modern era,
people
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can not
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be detached
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from the usage of
technology
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, especially the
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internet
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.
People
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, in any part of the globe
use
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internet
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the internet
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to support nearly all of their daily
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life
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lives
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.
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, workers
use
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internet
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the internet
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to finish their tasks and students
use
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internet
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the internet
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to study and
looking
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look
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for
informations
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information
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. In short,
technology
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has been a part of
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people
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people's
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daily
life
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.
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, despite the benefits of
technology
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, it
also
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bring
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brings
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some drawbacks. Because of the advancement of
the
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apply
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technology
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, some users of
technology
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have been using it to
inflicting
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inflict
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harm
to
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on
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others.
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, there are some
people
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who
use
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the
internet
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as a
mean
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means
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to scam someone to get some easy money. In brief, the
benefit
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benefits
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and
drawback
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drawbacks
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of
technology
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are depend
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depend
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on the user. Another problem
of
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with
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technology
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is that not all
people
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can afford it.
This
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happen
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because when
develope
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develop
developing
an equipment
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equipment
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, the developer
need
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needs
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many things and workers,
not to mention
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upgrading the equipment.
Develope
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Developing
a phone,
for instance
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,
require
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requires
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a lot of components and technicians to
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and
assembling
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it until it
arrive
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to customers.
To conclude
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,
technology
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can only
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use
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be used
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by some exclusive
people
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. In conclusion,
technology
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, especially the
internet
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has become a part of
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people
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people's
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daily
life
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in
this
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modern era.
However
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, not all
people
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have good
intention
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intentions
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when using it,
thus
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it
is depending
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depends
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on the user of the
technology
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to determine if the
advacement
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advancement
of
technology
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bring
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brings
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positive or negative impacts in
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people
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people's
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life
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • e-learning
  • accessibility
  • inclusive
  • productivity
  • personalized learning
  • disciplined routine
  • interpersonal skills
  • cybersecurity
  • sustainability
  • work-life balance
  • physical disabilities
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