Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

It is undeniable that in
this
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these
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modern days,
techonology
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technology
has been a big help to
the
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apply
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society. Some
people
believe
technology
bring
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brings
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positive effects for
people
.
However
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others
also
believe that
technology
also
bring
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brings
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some negative
effect
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effects
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to
people
.
This
essay will try to explain both sides. First of all, in
this
modern era,
people
can not
detached
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be detached
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from the usage of
technology
, especially the
internet
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.
People
, in any part of the globe
use
internet
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the internet
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to support nearly all of their daily
life
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lives
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.
For example
, workers
use
internet
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the internet
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to finish their tasks and students
use
internet
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the internet
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to study and
looking
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look
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for
informations
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information
pieces of information
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. In short,
technology
has been a part of
people
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people's
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daily
life
.
However
, despite the benefits of
technology
, it
also
bring
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brings
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some drawbacks. Because of the advancement of
the
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technology
, some users of
technology
have been using it to
inflicting
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inflict
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harm
to
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on
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others.
For example
, there are some
people
who
use
the
internet
as a
mean
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means
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to scam someone to get some easy money. In brief, the
benefit
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benefits
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and
drawback
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drawbacks
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of
technology
are depend
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depend
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on the user. Another problem
of
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with
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technology
is that not all
people
can afford it.
This
happen
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happens
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because when
develope
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develop
developing
an equipment
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equipment
a piece of equipment
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, the developer
need
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needs
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many things and workers,
not to mention
upgrading the equipment.
Develope
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Developing
a phone,
for instance
,
require
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requires
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a lot of components and technicians to
planning
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plan
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and
assembling
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assemble
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it until it
arrive
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to customers.
To conclude
,
technology
can only
use
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be used
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by some exclusive
people
. In conclusion,
technology
, especially the
internet
has become a part of
people
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people's
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daily
life
in
this
modern era.
However
, not all
people
have good
intention
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intentions
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when using it,
thus
it
is depending
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depends
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on the user of the
technology
to determine if the
advacement
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advancement
of
technology
bring
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brings
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positive or negative impacts in
people
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people's
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life
.
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