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Some think that quality art can be made by anyone while others think that it requires special talent and ability. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While
 some individuals believe that quality
art
 can be made by anyone, others think that it demands
talent
 and ability. I personally agree with the latter statement since
art
 not only can be taught but
also
 involves some degree of specific
talent
. It is somewhat true that
art
 can be made by anyone because
art
 is an expression of personal feelings and creativity.
For example
, many remarkable songs were written based on the writer's personal experience.
In addition
,
art
 is subjective; what one person considers quality may resonate deeply with another, regardless of the creator’s background.
However
, in terms of
art
 production, special
talent
 and ability becomes the essential factor to generate
highest
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 value of the
art
 itself.
Although
 having the same class
art
 lesson,
but
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the result
between
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for
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 people who
posess
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possess
am
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an
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 innate ability will be different for people who
didn't
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don't
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 have it.
For instance
, a musician with a singing
talent
 will sing better because they have a sense of
understand
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 the melody better than
non-musician
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a non-musician
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. In conclusion,
while
 anyone
considered
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can create any kind of
art
forms
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form
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, only individuals with particular
talent
could
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can
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 produce a higher level of
art
because
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because of
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 their flexibility and built-in creativity.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay provides a balanced discussion of both views which is good. However, you need to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main point and it is well-supported with relevant examples.
Introduction & Conclusion
The introduction is clear and sets the stage for the discussion. The conclusion effectively summarizes the essay’s main points, but try to make it a bit more comprehensive and reflective of all the key arguments.
Task Achievement
Include more relevant and specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, mentioning specific artists or events can help illustrate your points better.
Introduction & Conclusion
Your introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant to the topic.
Task Achievement
You have managed to cover both views, showing a balanced perspective.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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