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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. A1

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The map
illustrate
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illustrates
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 road admission to a
City
 Hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
, moving by transport significantly expanded in
this
city
.
Population
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The population
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 in the
City
 Hospital
was
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increased. People
Started
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started
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 to move by bus. It was the most convenient way to provide people.
In
addition
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addition,
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 we have alerts
of
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on
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 roads in order to avoid traffic jams.
Car
 parks
separated
Add a missing verb
are separated
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 so that
it
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they
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could
Wrong verb form
can
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 accommodate all cars. From 2007 to 2010 in a
City
 Hospital bus stops were removed and replaced to the bus station in the southwest corner. By 2010
car
 parks
divided
Add a missing verb
were divided
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 into two groups staff
car
park
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parks
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 and public
car
park
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parks
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.
City
 Hospital stayed in the same place as was before.
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