The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shop that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The aim of
this
report is to analyze the trends of shop
business related
activities throughout 2011-2018. As displayed in the provided statistics, the graph focuses on two main factors: Add a hyphen
business-related
shop
closures
and shop
openings
.
Overall
, in the given time period the graph depicts a consistent decline on
both factors. Change preposition
in
However
the number of Add a comma
However,
shop
closures
has dropped only mildly from exceeding 6000 in 2011 to falling just above 5000 in 2018. The number of shop
openings
has suffered a more noteworthy change in the graph. Since 2011 the amount has plummeted nearly three times in the following 7 years. Analysing the time period more carefully, it can be seen that shop
closures
, halfway through in
2015 fell Change preposition
apply
dramaticaly
, reaching just below 1000 Correct your spelling
dramatically
closures
. It culminated in 2013 overtaking seven times more closures
compared to the lowest point. Shop
openings
however
, suffered Add the comma(s)
, however
less
changes in the 7 years, reaching the peak at the starting point and falling Change the quantifier
fewer
the
lowest Change preposition
to the
at
2018.
Change preposition
in
In contrast
, the shop
openings
experienced a more sudden change during the time period. Shop
closures
managed to stabilize from the 2015 dip and the end result doesn’t drastically differentiate from the initial stage in 2011.Submitted by oimigle on
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