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Your friend is thinking about learning to drive and would like some advice. Write a letter to your friend. - Say why a driving license is advantageous - Recommend a driving school - Give extra guidance/ tips

#friend #drive #advice #license #school #guidance #tips
Hi, Anna!
In
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last
 time you told me about your desire to
learning
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learn
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 to drive. It’s a good decision to
learning
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 something new. The driving license
give
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 you some
advantageous
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.
Firstly
, you will be more flexible, you don’t need to use public transport anymore.
Secondly
, you will help your friend, if they
needed
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 to move some clothes.
Moreover
, you are going to earn many, if you find a job
on
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 delivery. I would like to recommend you an amazing school, where you could get a driver’s license. In
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center
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 city we have a DSAFF academy, I like it so much.
The
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 helped me with my permit and now I have three categories. What’s more, you need to go
on
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 school and
chose
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 the date for training. The
worker
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 in the administration are very polite,
the
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 can help you if you have
a
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 questions.
However
, I
always be
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 in touch with you. I hope my advice will serve the purpose, looking forward to
hear
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 from you Olga.
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language
There are a few grammatical errors and awkward phrases. Consider revising to improve clarity and correctness. For example, 'In last time' should be 'Last time,' and 'learning to drive' should be 'learn to drive.'
structure
Consider using paragraphs more effectively to separate different ideas. For example, one paragraph can be dedicated to the advantages of having a driving license, another one to recommending the school, and another one to extra tips.
coherence
Make sure to polish your sentences for better flow. For example, 'The helped me with my permit and now I have three categories' can be smoothed out to 'They helped me with my permit, and now I have licenses in three categories.'
task completion
You addressed all parts of the task, which is excellent.
tone
The tone of your letter is friendly and encouraging, which is perfect for a letter to a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • driving license
  • independence
  • commute
  • flexibility
  • reputable
  • certified instructors
  • high pass rate
  • road safety
  • regulations
  • driving conditions
  • driver's handbook
  • patience
  • practical skills
  • maneuverability
  • roadworthy
  • navigational skills
  • defensive driving
  • responsible attitude
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