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The diagram below shows how uranium is used in the production of nuclear power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how uranium is used in the production of nuclear power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied diagram illustrates the process of how the production of nuclear power
contains
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involves
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 the use of
uranium
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.
Overall
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,
uranium
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 is mined from the earth but it is not a natural procedure, because it contains machinery work.
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, it takes about 4 years to make
fuel
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 a spent. Generally speaking, First of all,
uranium
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 is collected from the earth. The
uranium
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 ore is converted from one form to another and improved to create U-235
fuel
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 pallets.
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, these
fuel
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 pallets require some industrial work, where U-235
fuel
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 power generators are used to make electricity.
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,
around
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 four years,
fuel
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 remains in factories and is
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 removed.
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,
although
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 some remaining
fuel
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 can be used for re-processing and re-using, spent
fuel
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 which cannot be reprocessed again is now stored in tanks and dug under the earth.
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, the whole process of using
uranium
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 in the production of nuclear energy is repeated in the same steps.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uranium, fuel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear fission
  • Radioactive material
  • Reactor core
  • Control rods
  • Coolant
  • Thermal energy
  • Steam generator
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Spent fuel
  • Radioactive waste
  • Depleted uranium
  • Decommissioning
  • Sustainable energy
  • Nuclear proliferation
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