Buying things on the internet, such e-books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping this way outweigh the disadvantages?
In the modernized world, purchasing goods
such
as e-books
, air tickets and groceries online through the Internet is becoming a prominent trend. This
trend brings both advantages and disadvantages towards the individual and the society and they will be explained.
On the one hand, online purchasing offers a wide range of family goods and e-books
which could
be viewed within a few clicks. Wrong verb form
can
This
saves money on fuel and reduces commuting time. As a result
, people will save money and the traffic will be reduced so the environment will be less polluted. Moreover
, expensive rare items can be imported which could be used to depict wealth and status. In addition
, children can read the latest e-books
just as they are released, where
libraries lack. Correct word choice
which
Also
, these digital texts can be accessed at any time or place. For example
, a student can read e-books
while
travelling without carrying a bunch of hard copies.
On the other hand
, returning to buying of
risky things like air tickets would be more trustworthy if it was done physically. Change preposition
apply
For instance
, the internet contains several similar websites to the original that redirects
to fraud sites, so spending huge amounts on plane tickets Correct subject-verb agreement
redirect
are
more likely at Correct subject-verb agreement
is
a
risk. Correct article usage
apply
Furthermore
, e-businesses overtaking local shops causes
losing people's careers and Change the verb form
cause
leads
to bankruptcy. Correct subject-verb agreement
lead
Nevertheless
, most goods delivered are damaged or irrelevant and do not offer money-back
guarantee, Correct article usage
a money-back
leading
customers frustrated and dissatisfied.
In conclusion, even though purchasing things online saves time, Verb problem
making
money
and is more convenient Correct word choice
and money
however
, the disadvantages like Add the comma(s)
, however
possibility
of greater fraud, hindering of jobs and Add an article
the possibility
frequent
damaged products outweigh the advantages.Change the adjective
frequently
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task response
Relevant points are raised that address both the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping.
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