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1. The diagram below shows the process of recycling glass bottles.

1. The diagram below shows the process of recycling glass bottles.
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The picture illustrates how
glass
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bottles
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 are recycled.
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, there are three stages and nine steps in the process of recycling
glass
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bottles
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, starting with gathering different kinds of
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bottles
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 and edding with displaying recycling
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 in a supermarket for clients to buy.
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,
glass
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bottles
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 are gathered before being sent to a collection point.
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, a truck delivers them to a cleaning manufacturer where
glass
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bottles
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 are made cleanly with water. Following that, they are carried to a recycling factory after being classified into three kinds, including clear, green, and brown material. In the next step,
glass
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bottles
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 are melted down into recycled liquid
glass
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 which is sources to produce new
bottles
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 through moulds. In the final step, these new
bottles
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 are transported to a supermarket for consumers to buy.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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