The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011
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The bar graph shows the
percentage
of households owned and rented
accommodation
in England and Wales between the period of 1918 and 2010. In England, people are gradually shifting towards
the
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owned
house
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houses
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as we can see the
percentage
of
household
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households
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in owned
accommodation
is
in
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an
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increasing trend
whereas
of
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for
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rented
accommodation
the
percentage
is declining.
Moreover
, in the late 20th century, the
percentage
of the
household
for
both
the year is equal. We can
also
notice a little fluctuation in the
percentage
of households for
both
of the
accommodation
in the later
years
. With regard to owned
accommodation
, the first 35
years
were very challenging. The proportion of
household
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households
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for
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rented apartments for these
years
was around 70%
while
owned housing was only about 20% to 30%. The year 1971 was a game changer as
a
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household
for
both
the
accommodation
came into equilibrium reaching 50%.
In contrast
to the previous,
years
, people
start
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started
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preferring
own
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to own
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house
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a house
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rather than
rented
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rent
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which reduced to 40% in 1981 followed by approximately 30% in 1991 and 2001.
However
, 2011 experienced a little variation in the
percentage
of
both
the
accommodation
, with around 5% increment in rented and the same
percentage
reduction in owned
accommodation
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, accommodation, household, both, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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