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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The following bar chart illustrates
people
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's preferences in buying and drinking
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in five Australian
cities
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.
Atfirst
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At first
 glance, it is evident that four out of five
cities
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'
residents
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 chose
having
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to have
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 their
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in a
cafe
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 over buying fresh or
instant
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coffee
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.
Adelaide
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were
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was
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 the only city where most
people
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prefer
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preferred
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purcharing
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purchasing
instant
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coffee
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. Looking at the details of the bars for fresh
coffee
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, it can be seen that Sydney,
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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people
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 bought fresh
coffee
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 more than those in
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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 with less than 45%, almost 42.5% and less than 40%, respectively.
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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 were the
cities
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 where
near
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nearly
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 35% of individuals bought fresh
coffee
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. In terms of
instant
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coffee
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,
Hobart
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residents
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 tended to buy more
instant
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coffee
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 than
people
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 in other
cities
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 with a percentage of only a little bit less than 55%.
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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 and
Melbourne
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 came next with approximately 52.5%, 50% and less than 50%, respectively.
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, Sydney
people
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 bought the least
instant
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coffee
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. Taking a closer look at the proportion of
Autralian
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Australian
people
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 who visited a
cafe
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for drinking
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to drink
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coffee
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 or
tea
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, it is obvious that the percentages of
residents
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 in 4
cities
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 of
Hobart
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,
Melbourne
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, Sydney and
Brisbane
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 were not less than 55%.
Hobart
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 and
Melbourne
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people
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 went to a
cafe
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 more than other 3
cities
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 with 60% and almost half.
Adelaide
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 was at the bottom of the order with less than 50% of
residents
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 having their
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in a
cafe
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, tea, cities, residents, cafe, instant, adelaide, melbourne, hobart, brisbane with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • purchase locations
  • frequency
  • influencing factors
  • artisanal
  • preferences
  • survey data
  • market trends
  • specialty stores
  • drinking habits
  • urban consumption
  • morning rush
  • afternoon break
  • brand loyalty
  • quality-conscious
  • convenience-driven
  • organic products
  • habitual drinkers
  • occasional consumers
  • taste preferences
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