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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The following bar chart illustrates
people
's preferences in buying and drinking
coffee
 and
tea
 in five Australian
cities
.
Atfirst
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At first
 glance, it is evident that four out of five
cities
'
residents
 chose
having
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to have
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 their
coffee
 or
tea
 in a
cafe
 over buying fresh or
instant
coffee
.
Adelaide
were
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was
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 the only city where most
people
prefer
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preferred
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purcharing
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purchasing
instant
coffee
. Looking at the details of the bars for fresh
coffee
, it can be seen that Sydney,
Melbourne
 and
Hobart
people
 bought fresh
coffee
 more than those in
Brisbane
 and
Adelaide
 with less than 45%, almost 42.5% and less than 40%, respectively.
Brisbane
 and
Adelaide
 were the
cities
 where
near
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nearly
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 35% of individuals bought fresh
coffee
. In terms of
instant
coffee
,
Hobart
residents
 tended to buy more
instant
coffee
 than
people
 in other
cities
 with a percentage of only a little bit less than 55%.
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
 and
Melbourne
 came next with approximately 52.5%, 50% and less than 50%, respectively.
Finally
, Sydney
people
 bought the least
instant
coffee
. Taking a closer look at the proportion of
Autralian
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Australian
people
 who visited a
cafe
for drinking
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to drink
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coffee
 or
tea
, it is obvious that the percentages of
residents
 in 4
cities
 of
Hobart
,
Melbourne
, Sydney and
Brisbane
 were not less than 55%.
Hobart
 and
Melbourne
people
 went to a
cafe
 more than other 3
cities
 with 60% and almost half.
Adelaide
 was at the bottom of the order with less than 50% of
residents
 having their
coffee
 or
tea
 in a
cafe
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, tea, cities, residents, cafe, instant, adelaide, melbourne, hobart, brisbane with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • purchase locations
  • frequency
  • influencing factors
  • artisanal
  • preferences
  • survey data
  • market trends
  • specialty stores
  • drinking habits
  • urban consumption
  • morning rush
  • afternoon break
  • brand loyalty
  • quality-conscious
  • convenience-driven
  • organic products
  • habitual drinkers
  • occasional consumers
  • taste preferences
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