The map below is of the town of Galrsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Galrsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map
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the two possible places for
new
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a new
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supermarket
that is
going to be built in Galrsdon.
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, the new supermarket options are significantly different as site 1 (S1)
in
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situated in the countryside,
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and site
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2 (S2)
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in the middle of an industrial area. S1 possible situation is in a north-west countryside area, it is
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allocated close to
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road that goes to Hindon which has a population of 10,000. S2 is in the middle of an industrial area with houses in both north and south.
Also
will be in the middle of two main roads. The road that goes to Cransdon and on the other side the road that travels to Bransdon. There is
also
a railway that runs close to S1 but it runs
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thought
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the possible place for S2
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