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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the coutryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development

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Worldwide the population
form
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from
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 the countryside is going to live in the cities,
this
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and this
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 is causing a decline
of
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in
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 numbers in the rural
areas
. In my opinion,
this
 only has
drawnbacks
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drawbacks
 to the country, as in order to maintain a
healthly
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healthy
 economy we need the rural
areas
 to have population.
Firstly
, as a
consequency
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consequence
 of our modern
society
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 more people like to live in the city. It is true that
,
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apply
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the cities are given to the young generations, the
resorces
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resources
 and experiences to develop their future careers.
The rural
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Rural
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areas
are
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have been
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 suffering
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this
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these
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 issues
since
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for
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long
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 time ago. Nowadays, there are not enough people to work the land to produce food. It has been said on TV and
in
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 the radio that in the UK the farmers are selling their fields for construction because their generation is getting old and
noone
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no one
 can work their land as the young generations are more
incline
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 to have work office jobs in the city.
Moreover
,
as a result
 of
this
 more food products need to be imported from another country which
increase
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 the final price of the product. The government should start promoting the rural
areas
 by improving the benefits,
for example
, if the
goverment
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government
 would make more
atractive
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attractive
 the farm jobs
like
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 reducing the
electicity
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electricity
 bill perhaps more people would decide to go back to the villages. In conclusion, if the villages and the rural
areas
 get empty ,we will not have enough food and the cost of living will increase as a
consequency
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consequence
.
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