The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The graphs show changes in spending habits of people in UK between 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
The two pie charts given compare the changes in spending habits of
people
on seven consumable goods (
food
,
cars
,
computers
, furniture,
petrol
, restaurants and
books
) in the United Kingdom in the years 1971 and 2001.
Overall
, a significant change is noticed in the expenditure
of
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on
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cars
,
computers
and restaurants; which has increased
almost
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by almost
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two to
three
folds.
On the other hand
, there is a minimum change in the spending on
petrol
and furniture.
However
, the money spent on
food
and
books
has declined moderately.
To begin
with, the
three
major durable goods that have moderately increased over
three
decades are
cars
and
computers
. The money spent by
people
on
cars
was only 22% in 1971,
in
contrast
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contrast,
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43% of
wealth
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the wealth
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was splurged on
cars
in the year 2001.
Similarly
, the expense
on
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of
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computers
was only 2% in
seventies
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the seventies
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, compared to in 2001,
the
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when the
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cost increased by six folds up to 12%. The spending on
petrol
has
also
doubled from 7% to 14% in
three
decades.
On the other hand
, it is observed that there has been a steady decline in spending habits of
people
on
food
and
books
. The expense of English
people
on
food
was 44% in 1971 which dropped to 14% in the year 2001.
Likewise
, the spending on
books
also
fell from 6% to 1% over thirty years. There is only minimal change noticed
on
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in
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the money spent on
petrol
and restaurants, dropping to only 1% over
three
decades.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, on the other hand".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, cars, computers, petrol, books, three with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moderately" was used 2 times.

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