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66. The charts below show how water was used in Australia in 2004. Summarize the informatior by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

66. The charts below show how water was used in Australia in 2004. Summarize the informatior by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of total water
usage
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 in Australia in two years, 1997 and 2007, broken down by
sector
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:
household
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 use, service
industry
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, building
industry
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, manufacturing, and
food
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industry
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. In 1997, the
food
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industry
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 was the largest consumer, accounting for 48% of total
usage
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,
while
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 the
household
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sector
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 consumed 19%. The manufacturing and service industries used 15% and 13%, respectively, and the building
industry
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 had the smallest share at 5%.
This
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 distribution indicates the
food
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industry
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's heavy reliance on water for irrigation and
food
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 production. By 2007,
usage
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 had shifted slightly. The
food
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industry
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 remained the dominant
sector
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 but saw its share decrease to 41%.
Household
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 use increased to 21%,
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 the manufacturing and service industries reduced their shares to 11% and 10%. The building
industry
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 has seen minimal change, still using 5%.
Overall
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,
usage
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 by the
food
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industry
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 experienced a slight decline,
while
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 the
household
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sector
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 saw an increase, reflecting a significant shift in sectoral demands over the decade.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, sector, household, industry, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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