The map below shows the development of the museum between 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the museum between 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given map illustrates the evolution of the
museum
in the period of 3 years, particularly from 2010 to 2013.
Overall
, the area of the
museum
nearly doubled because some new sections were constructed.
Also
, the garden was chopped to widen the
museum
's territory. The mammals
section
was replaced with the ice age
section
, if
this
section
was on the left side from the entrance in 2010,
then
in 2013 it was on the right side.
In addition
, on the place where that
section
was located below, the small insect
section
was constructed. In 2010, on the right part of the
museum
area, there was a garden,
nevertheless
, after it was demolished in 2013, some new facilities
such
as a cafe, shop and human ongoings display were built. Obviously, the
mammal's
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section
is located in the same sector and holds a bigger space,
while
the cafe is the smallest
section
on the right.
Finally
, the entrance, ticket desk, lobby and ocean hall did not change at all.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, section with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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