The table provides information the reasons of people using the car in city, and the pie chart shows the percentage of transport namely car, LRT(Light Rail Transit), bus and taxi.

The table provides information the reasons of people using the car in city, and the pie chart shows the percentage of transport namely car, LRT(Light Rail Transit), bus and taxi.
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The above pie chart reveals data on the reason why
do
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people are using the vehicles in city. It
is demonstrates
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the percentage of what people
used
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use
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for transportation cars, LRT,
bus
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buses
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or
taxi
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taxis
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Overall
, the most significant feature is the car percentage contributed the highest score.
While
the lowest rate was related to bus and taxi
consuming
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. It is noticeable that
car
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cars
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show the strongest percentage which is 45%.
However
, the number of
bus
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buses
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and
taxi
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taxis
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exhibited
similar
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a similar
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amount with 10%.
Moreover
, the rate of people
how
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who
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used to take LRT had
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an intermediate
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score which is 35%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban mobility
  • societal inclination
  • personal space
  • scheduling freedom
  • cost-efficiency
  • public transport systems
  • convenience
  • time-efficiency
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainable urban planning
  • mobility challenges
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