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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Estimated world illiteracy rates, by region and by gender, last year
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The bar chart delineates the
population
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 by sex and region of worldwide
illiteracy
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.
Overall
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, an obviously noticeable fact that emerges is that females overtake the male
population
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 for
greater
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 rate of
illiteracy
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. Right off the bat, developed countries witnessed only a small percentage of
illiteracy
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 with both below one-tenth of its
population
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. Other than that, the Caribbean’s male rate of
illiteracy
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 is just above 10% and
female
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the female
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 percentage is slightly above theirs.
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, Sub-Saharan has over 30% male illiterate
citizen
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citizens
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 and less than half of illiterate female citizens. On a
further
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 note, it can be observed that Oceania has less
that
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than
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 one-tenth of male
illiterates
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, and one-fifth of female
illiterates
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, causing them to have over a whopping 50% difference in citizens that cannot read.
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Arab States
has
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 a 20%
differences
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difference
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 in illiterate
citizen
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citizens
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 of over 50% for
female
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females
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 and around one-third of its male
population
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,
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, South Asia, with the largest percentage of female
illiterates
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 (55%) and male
illiterates
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 (35%) causing a 20% difference in its functionally reading-abled citizen
population
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, illiteracy, illiterates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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