The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
The pie chart illustrates the activities of anthropology
graduates
after getting degrees from the university,
while
the table reveals that the salaries of anthropology
graduates
are worth five years of work in three different types of employment. 
Overall
, it can be seen that 52% of the
graduates
do full-time work but
however
part-time
workers
and those who do postgrad study are at the least. The graph shows that 52% of the
graduates
are full-time
workers
and a quarter are part-time
workers
. Most noticeable of all, it can be seen that the proportion of part-time
workers
and postgrad study is 5%, which is the lowest. 12% are unemployed and
graduates
who did full-time postgrad study are 8% and the rest is not known. The table reveals that half of the anthropologists working in the government sector receive over $100,000+ salary,
while
60% of freelancers who work as consultants receive a $25,000 to $99,999 salary. In private companies, 35% of the
graduates
receive $50,000-$74,999.
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