As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that nowadays majority of the population of the world

depend

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on technologies and

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use

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them as a

mean

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means

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of reducing their hurdles, which is effective for humans and a

time

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will come when too much

relying

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on technology will

ruine

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ruin

human's

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lives. I completely agree with the idea and will support my opinion with examples in

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essay. I will quote different means of

techonologies

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technology

that slow down

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human difficulties and

also

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I will mention how each of them

effect

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the

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man's ability to think. Commening to the idea, it is true that scientific

inovations

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innovations

have made today's life easier than it was before.

People

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use

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these

inovations

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innovations

to combat

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obsticles

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obstacles

in their lives .

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human's

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life

have

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completely transformed before and after adding the

techonologies

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technologies

to their routine.

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invention

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the invention

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of Cars

have

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both negative and positive

impact

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individuals

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life

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. No doubt it

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made transportation easier, but

one

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can not deny the fact, that the automatic cars have harmed many lives and

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it has made

human

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lazy. Before

invention

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of cars,

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inhabitants

used

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to travel on foot or bicycles,

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it was a

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time consuming

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act

but

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still it had some positive

impact

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on individuals, like

through

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walking on foot makes

ones

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leg stronger and

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increases

their

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stamina.

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use

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of the Chat GPT and other AI tools

are

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also

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popular currently.

People

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use

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these

inovations

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innovations

for writing

contents

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or school assignments, which is a dangerous act

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because getting materials from

chatgpt

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ChatGPT

do not involve their personal thinking, which in turn

shrink

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one

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's mental capabilities. Even, sometimes

people

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use

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different

grammarly

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grammar

apps to correct their grammar mistakes, which again is a risk for their learning phase. Because of these apps, learners are not able to master their

gammmatical

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grammatical

mistakes.

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, smartphones make

people

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isolated as, they only call

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their

love

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ones and do not

preffer

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prefer

to visit them, which

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their

relation

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with each

others

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, the mobile users do not even have

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for their families.

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According to the

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research conducted in

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the US

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, shows that too much spending

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and sitting in

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posture

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using

cellphones

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made them

lost

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their

eyesights

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and many were

paralized

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paralysed

Henc

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Hence

, it is clear from the above argument

the

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that

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too much

relying

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on these scientific inventions will shrink

one

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cognetive

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cognitive

abilities and reducing

its

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their

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use

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in their daily routine will make them fit, mentally and physically.

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Task Response

Make sure to proofread your essay to correct spelling and grammatical errors. Improving grammar and spelling will enhance your clarity and make your argument more compelling.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure that each main point is clearly supported by relevant examples or evidence. This will help in making your argument stronger and more convincing to the reader.

Coherence and Cohesion

Work on providing a logically structured argument in each paragraph. This can be improved by starting each paragraph with a clear topic sentence and making sure that all following sentences are relevant to that main idea.

Task Achievement

You presented a clear stance and explained it convincingly.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay is well-organized with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Task Achievement

You used relevant examples to support your argument, making your points more concrete.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

404 words

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Over-reliance
Cognitive capabilities
Critical thinking
Problem-solving skills
Diminish
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Natural sense of direction
Access to information
Cognitive development
Education reforms
Technological advancement
Nuanced position
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