As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that nowadays majority of the population of the world
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on technologies and
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them as a
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of reducing their hurdles, which is effective for humans and a
time
will come when too much
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on technology will
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ruin
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lives. I completely agree with the idea and will support my opinion with examples in
this
essay. I will quote different means of
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technology
that slow down
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human difficulties and
also
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man's ability to think. Commening to the idea, it is true that scientific
inovations
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innovations
have made today's life easier than it was before.
People
use
these
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innovations
to combat
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obsticles
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obstacles
in their lives .
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,
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life
have
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completely transformed before and after adding the
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technologies
to their routine.
Firstly
,
invention
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of Cars
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both negative and positive
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on
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life
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. No doubt it
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made transportation easier, but
one
can not deny the fact, that the automatic cars have harmed many lives and
also
it has made
human
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lazy. Before
invention
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of cars,
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inhabitants
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to travel on foot or bicycles,
although
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act
but
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still it had some positive
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on individuals, like
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walking on foot makes
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leg stronger and
also
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stamina.
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use
of the Chat GPT and other AI tools
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also
popular currently.
People
use
these
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innovations
for writing
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or school assignments, which is a dangerous act
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because getting materials from
chatgpt
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ChatGPT
do not involve their personal thinking, which in turn
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one
's mental capabilities. Even, sometimes
people
use
different
grammarly
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grammar
apps to correct their grammar mistakes, which again is a risk for their learning phase. Because of these apps, learners are not able to master their
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mistakes.
Thirdly
, smartphones make
people
isolated as, they only call
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their
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ones and do not
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prefer
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their
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with each
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.
Also
, the mobile users do not even have
time
for their families.
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research conducted in
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, shows that too much spending
time
and sitting in
one
posture
while
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made them
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their
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and many were
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paralysed
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Hence
, it is clear from the above argument
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too much
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on these scientific inventions will shrink
one
's
cognetive
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cognitive
abilities and reducing
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in their daily routine will make them fit, mentally and physically.
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You used relevant examples to support your argument, making your points more concrete.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Over-reliance
  • Cognitive capabilities
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Diminish
  • Augment
  • Natural sense of direction
  • Access to information
  • Cognitive development
  • Education reforms
  • Technological advancement
  • Nuanced position
  • Recapitulate
  • Affirm
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