Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.
It is often said that the government should spend some budget for the development of the country on the railways more than
roads
. I agree with Use synonyms
this
statement because train tracks Linking Words
has
more benefits Change the verb form
have
services
for Correct word choice
and services
large scale
populations.
Add a hyphen
large-scale
To begin
with, let's take a look at the factor why railways have more benefits than Linking Words
roads
. Nowadays, several Use synonyms
people
have Use synonyms
a
personal cars and these reasons have an impact on Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
environment
. Add an article
the environment
Due to
the fact that cars or even the process of building Linking Words
roads
Use synonyms
causes
a lot of pollution Change the verb form
cause
moreover
, it has many affected Linking Words
people
in that area if some area where Use synonyms
roads
are being built. Meanwhile, instituting the railway has advantages Use synonyms
than
in the reasons of sustainability and lifetime that more valuable than.
Change preposition
apply
In addition
, railways are generally more sustainable and have a lower environmental footprint compared to Linking Words
roads
. As they can move great quantities of population and goods more efficiently.Use synonyms
Furthermore
, it less pollution in view of the fact that the trend of eco-friendly is awareness in society today if governments can do Linking Words
this
project they can have advertising with Linking Words
this
trend as well.
Other than that, it can be a soft power that makes income for the Linking Words
the
country. Remove the redundancy
apply
For example
, in Linking Words
Japan
a lot of tourists go to Japan because of the trains that have Add a comma
Japan,
a
cartoon Correct article usage
apply
character
as Hello Fix the agreement mistake
characters such
kitty
, Doraemon and Picacho Capitalize word
Kitty
the
famous character from Japan. So when Correct article usage
a
trouist
come to see Correct your spelling
tourist
tourists
this
train with their own eyes and post it on any social it can be Linking Words
the
advertisement without any Correct article usage
an
paid
and have several Replace the word
pay
people
interested Use synonyms
with
it.
Change preposition
in
To sum up
, train tracks have many advantages because it is more efficient in use and environmentally friendly than building Linking Words
roads
that cause problems affecting Use synonyms
people
rather than creating benefits and can promote the country Use synonyms
in
the same time.Change preposition
at
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