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The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of
Japanese
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 travellers in other countries over 11 years from 1985 to 1995, the units of data show millions of
people
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.
In addition
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, the below chart provides information on
Japanese
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 tourists who chose to come to
Australia
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 over a decade from 1985 to 1994, the units indicated in percentages.
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, the travelling trend of
Japanese
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people
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 increased continuously
,
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 and
also
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 affected the significant uptrend of visiting
Australia
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. First and foremost, the rising number of
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 tourists numbers in 1985 was only 5 million
people
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.
On the other hand
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, in 1995, the
Japanese
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 travelled more than 15 million
people
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. Even though the trend dropped a bit in 1991, the main reason can be summarized as that not come from
Australia
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's travelling. The trend in
Australia
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 in 1991 remained upward.
While
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 in 1989 and 1994,
Japanese
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 individuals decreased travelling in
Australia
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,
this
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 issue did not affect to total number of abroad tours of
Japanese
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japanese, people, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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