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The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph displays data for six different urban
area
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areas
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 on the underground systems.
Overall
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,
New
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the New
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 York
City
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Subway
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 has the most outnumbered
lines
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 and its total length, which is 659
miles
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while
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Beijing
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the Beijing
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Subway
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 has the highest record on
the
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apply
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annual journeys, which is 3.6
billions
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billion
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.
However
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,
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London
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the London
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Tube
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 has the highest cost of
single
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a single
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 ticket, which
cost
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costs
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 7.30 dollars. To start with, the
most
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apply
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least
lines
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gives
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are given
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 to
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London
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the London
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Tube
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while
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 the other
metro
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 systems
holds
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hold
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 an average
from
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of
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 13-19
lines
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, with the most
lines
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,
that is
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 24
lines
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 in
New
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the New
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 York
City
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Subway
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.
In addition
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, there are three
sytems
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systems
have
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that have
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 the three lowest
in
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apply
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total length, which is Tokyo
Subway
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, Paris
Metro
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 and Mexico
City
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Metro
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 with 189, 127 and 140
miles
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 each, despite the New York
City
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Subway
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has
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having
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 the most total length, with 659
miles
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, followed by Beijing
Subway
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 with 357
miles
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 and
London
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Tube
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 with 249
miles
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. For
the
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apply
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yearly journeys, with 3.6
billions
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billion
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, Beijing
Subway
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 currently holds the record with 2.4
billions
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billion
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 more
that
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than
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 the lowest one in
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London
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the London
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tube
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. The cheapest cost for a single ticket can be found in the Mexico
City
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Metro
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with
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at
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 only 23 cents each
while
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 the pricey one,
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that
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which
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 is 7.30 dollars can be found on
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London
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the London
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tube
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, subway, lines, miles, london, tube, metro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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