The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the whole world and in different parts of the world.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the whole world and in different parts of the world.
The bar chart
illustrate
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the percentage of the population living in civil areas in different parts of the world.
Overall
, most of the population
lives
in
the
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North
America
and Latin
America
during the years.
While
the
manority
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majority
minority
of people
lives
in
the
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Asia and Africa. The increase was stable in the all different continents in the
last
period
compared
in
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the first
period
. In the
1950
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1950s
, around 64% of people
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in North
America
,
while
a
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half of them
lives
in Europe.
On the other hand
, just a quarter of
population
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lives
in Africa
at
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during
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the same
period
. In
the
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2015 and 2050, the percentage of
the
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people
in
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all continents
was
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similar. just a little increase between the two years in the same category. North
America
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countinue
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number
went up throughout the given
period
.
Moreover
, Latin
America
and Europe
they
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remain one of the most populous continents after North
America
While
, Africa and
Aisa
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Asia
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remained the least populated during the
period
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words lives, america, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • percentage
  • population
  • regions
  • trends
  • global
  • increase/decrease
  • patterns
  • compare/contrast
  • noteworthy
  • industrialization
  • economic factors
  • migration
  • government policies
  • bar chart illustrates
  • overall trend
  • noticeable
  • particularly
  • summarize
  • highlight
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