The line graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean iakand betveen 2010 and 2017.

The line graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean iakand betveen 2010 and 2017.
The line graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean
island
from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, the total number of tourists visiting the Caribbean
island
always increased during the whole period.
Additionally
, the figure for
visitors
staying on cruise ships was lower than that for those choosing to stay on the
island
during most of the period. In 2010, the total quantity of tourists
traveling
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to the Caribbean
island
stood at exactly 1
million
.
Consequently
, from 2012 to 2015 the total number of
tourist
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tourists
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rapidly
growth
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then
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in one period gap maintained its level at 2.7
million
. Between 2016
to
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2017 it showed dramatic growth.
On the other hand
, the
visitors
staying on cruise ships and
visitors
staying on the
island
were nearly 0.3
million
and 0.7
million
respectively.
Visitors
staying on the
island
remained the same in the first year
then
slowly increased up to 1.5
million
then
it held the same position from 2013 to 2015.
However
,
visitors
staying on the
island
had some fluctuation in the
last
two years.
Moreover
, the
visitors
staying on cruise ships experienced the lowest point of first after facing ups and downs able to record second position. It had a dramatic upgrade to reach approximately 2
million
in 2017.
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