The graph below shows the consumption of fish in different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish in different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004
The provided graph gives information about the amount of food which was consumed in a European country over a twenty-five year
period
between 1979 and 2004.
Overall
, it is obviously seen that at the beginning of the
period
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period,
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the most popular food was
beef
, but end of the
period
chicken
was the most popular and dramatic increase
compare
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with 1979. Getting back to the details as regards
chicken
was 150
grams
per person per week in 1979,
then
increased gradually in 1989 consumption of
chicken
was 200
grams
and end of the
period
reached
at
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250
grams
.
By
contrast
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contrast,
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consumption of meat (
beef
and lamb)
were
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a
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apply
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rapid decrease
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rapidly decreased
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. From 1979 to 1984 using of
beef
was a
wildly
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fluctuation,
then
a remarkable decrease. If we look at
beef
and lamb were similar
trend
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trends
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over the analyzed
period
. We observed the analyzed
period
people less used meat than
chicken
. Over the
25 year
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25-year
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period
consumption of fish did not change. As it was 50
grams
and remained
also
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, beef, chicken, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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