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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land become lesson productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land become lesson productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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The pie chart gives data about
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 reasons
of
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for
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 unproductive agriculture, with
table
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a table
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 chart indicating how these reasons affected
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North America, Europe, and Oceania in
1990s
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the 1990s
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.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 over-grazing and
deforestation
 were the leading causes of
land
 degradation globally, but have varied significantly across different regions. As can be seen from the pie chart, there are four main reasons
of
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 unproductive
land
, including over-grazing at 35%,
deforestation
 at 30%, over-cultivation at 28%, and
other factor
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 at 7%.
However
, these factors do not directly
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on
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these three regions. In Europe,
deforestation
 was the leading factor responsible for the total
land
 degradation at 23 per cent with 9%
deforestation
, followed by over-grazing at 7.7 per cent and over-grazing at 5.5%. In Oceania, oppositely, over-grazing
leaded
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led
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 the most significant part at 11.3 per cent, and
deforestation
 at 1,7% with
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causes
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caused
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 by
over cultivation
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over-cultivation
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Total
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 grand degraded parts of
South
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the South
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 Pacific island consists
13
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of 13
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%.
Nevertheless
,
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North
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 America at 5% total degraded
land
, became more productive than other regions. Over-cultivation had the largest impact at 3.3%, meanwhile over-grazing
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 1,5% and
deforestation
 was less significant at 0.2% of unproductiveness.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words deforestation, land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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