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You rented TV from Samsung company.The TV hasnʼt turned on .you phoned the company a week ago but it still has not been repaired. - intorduce yourself. - explain situation. - say what action you would like the company to take.

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to you to complain about the
problemwith
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problem with
 television which I rented on 19
september
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September
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 from Samsung company . My name is Muhammedov Makhmudali.And at the moment I am
student
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a student
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 so I need a television
for learning
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to learn
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 English
by
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online . The television that I have rented is
Samsung
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a Samsung
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 smart TV 35 model.When I was trying to turn on
TV
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the TV
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 but it isnʻt turn on ,
then
 I was angry . Despite the fact that I have already contacted the company about the problem a week ago .But nothing has been done yet .
Then
 the company
contact
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and
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epologize
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apologised
me
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to me
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 .And I told them to be
carefully
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.They
leplaced
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replaced
placed
 my TV with a new one .
Your
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 faithfully Muxammadov Maxmudali
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task achievement
Work on developing clearer and more comprehensive ideas in your response. Provide more specific details and examples related to the issue.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure of your email. Make sure the sequence of events is clear and each point is well connected to the next.
coherence cohesion
Be sure to proofread your writing for any grammatical mistakes and to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly states the purpose of the letter.
task achievement
Good effort in providing personal details to explain the situation.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion includes a request for specific action, which is good practice in letter writing.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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