Write a letter to a bookstore manager who is living in another city. Ask him/ her to make available a book that you are interested in. In you letter. - What book you are looking for? - Why you need this book. - How you plan to purchase the book.

Dear Sir or Madam , I am writing to request you
for keeping
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the
book
in advance for me because
i
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am not able to purchase it online . I am looking for the English Reading
book
for my IELTS exam , which is coming next week .
Although
, I contacted
book
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the book
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store manager of my city
but
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, unfortunately , someone reserved it. I need
this
book
for my exam preparation .
This
book
contains information regarding how to improve reading skills
as well as
updated
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IELTS topic
of
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this
year .
Therefore
,
i
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think
this
book
will improve my scores dramatically .
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,I
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your website online in order to purchase
book
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the book
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but unfortunately payment
didn't
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approved . I would really appreciate
if
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you please
reserved
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book
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a book
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for 13 hours , so , i
will
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come directly to your store and purchase it . Thanks for your consideration .
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faithfully , Roopkamal
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Structure
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. Your letter does a decent job at this but could be clearer in distinguishing the paragraphs' contents.
Formatting
Use paragraphing effectively to separate different ideas for better readability and coherence. Consider adding a line break between greetings, body paragraphs, and the closing.
Detail
To improve task achievement, be more specific about the book's title and author. Providing detailed information can make your request clearer and shows a strong understanding of the task.
Tone
Adopt a more consistent formal tone throughout your letter. For example, avoid using contractions (i.e., use 'I am' instead of 'i am') and ensure proper punctuation and capitalization to maintain formality.
Formality
Your greeting and closing are mostly appropriate for the task, but remember to capitalize 'Sir' or 'Madam' and 'Your faithfully' to 'Yours faithfully,' along with 'I' throughout your letter.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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