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The line chart below illustrates the amount of worldwide tourist arrivals in 5 countries from 1995 until 2010. Overall, all of the nations presented had seen the increase in that number.

The line chart below illustrates the amount of worldwide tourist arrivals in 5 countries from 1995 until 2010. Overall, all of the nations presented had seen the increase in that number.
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The line graph illustrates the information about the number of
tourist
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 around the globe, who visited 5 states from 1995 to 2010.
Also
, the graph tells us about the various pandemic levels and
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increase and decrease of the
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in
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 it. Before 1995, it has been noticed that only 500
M
 individuals visited internationally. But soon after 1995 to 2005, as it was the time of
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 epidemic, in which
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slightly
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 growth in the number of
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 was recorded.
However
, in 2010, in the financial crisis era,
tourists
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approch
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approach
 to
international
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 world was near
to
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1000
M
. As far as the report
of
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 2022 and 2023 by UNWTO is concerned, the international
tourist
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tourists
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which
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were about 1500
M
 in 2020, but soon after the Covid-19 Pandemic in 2020, a dramatic decline of
the
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visitors was seen, which
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less than 500
M
 in 2020 and before 2022.
Moreover
,
rapid
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 climb in the tourism sector was found in 2022, which later reached near to 1500
M
 visitors in 2023.
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