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the chart below give information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

the chart below give information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar charts illustrate percentages of weekly spending on 8 aspects (
food
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, housing, fuel and power, clothing and footwear, household goods, personal goods, transport, and
leisure
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) in households in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, formerly, the households spent more
money
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 on
food
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 in 1968, lattery,
leisure
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 was the majority aspect that the families spent most of their
money
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 in 2018.
In contrast
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, the least amount of
money
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 was spent on fuel and power in the period given.
Furthermore
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, the most significant disparity in
money
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 distributed was on
food
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. In terms of
food
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, people spent about 35% of their funds in 1968, compared to just around 20% in 2018.
Similarly
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, clothing and footwear, fuel and power, and personal goods were spent 5-10% in 1968,
this
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 amount was higher than only below 5% in 2018.
On the other hand
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, the amount of
money
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 paid out on housing, transport, and
leisure
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 was less in 1968 than in 2018. Approximately 10% was spent on housing and
leisure
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 respectively in 1968, as opposed to both aspects, which had around 20% in 2018. As regards transport, which had 10% in 1968, it increased to around 15% in 2018.
Conversely
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, the only aspect that had similar percentages of weekly funds was household golds, which accounted for around 8% throughout 4 decades.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, leisure, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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