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Some people say that main environmental problems of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Recently, some debates about the reasons
of
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 environmental problems have
been risen
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. Some believe that the main factor in
destruction
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the destruction
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 of
earth
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the earth
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,
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 is related to the extinction of some kinds of plants and animals.
On the other hand
, I believe that the negative
changes
 in our habitat have serious reasons, which both viewpoints will be discussed below. To commence with, based on a notion, the detrimental
changes
 on
earth
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 could be related to the loss of some floras and faunas. With
regards
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 to
this
 matter, it could be inferred that some plants and animals had
crucial
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 role
on
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 the atmosphere of
earth
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. It seems that
,
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 these creatures, could filter the harmful elements of polluted air or soil, which in turn, could create
better
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 life quality for humankind.
For instance
, there were some kinds of trees around Tabriz, which had a great role in cleaning the polluted weather, and they
had
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provided a safe nest for a specific
kind
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kinds
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 of birds. After destroying
this
 area, the air quality decreased;
moreover
,
due to
this
condition
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 the population of a specific kind of insects increased
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 and caused immense problems for farmers.
On the other hand
, others believe that the reasons
of
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 deleterious
changes
 on the
earth
,
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 could be related to fundamental aspects. Their logic is based on the harmful activity of humankind in
the
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nature. Individuals
for
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facilitating their
life
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lives
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 reshape the
earth
, which
consequently
, could affect the environment negatively.
For example
, destroying jungles and using vehicles could damage the plants and animals’ habitats. In a nutshell, views about negative alteration in
environment
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the environment
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 have
risen
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 many debates. Some believe that these negative
changes
 are related to some flora and fauna extinction;
however
, others think that the negative effect of mankind living
,
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 could cause serious
damages
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damage
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on
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 the
earth
.
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coherence cohesion
Focus on clarifying your main points and ensure that each paragraph flows logically from one to the next. While your ideas are relevant, they can sometimes lack clarity.
introduction conclusion present
Ensure your introduction clearly outlines what the essay will discuss. Your introduction now hints at this but can be strengthened for a higher score.
task achievement
Make sure to provide balanced views in both paragraphs, offering more detailed analysis and specific examples to support each viewpoint.
complete response
Your essay addresses both views and provides your opinion, meeting the requirements of the task.
relevant specific examples
The essay contains specific examples, like the trees around Tabriz, which add credibility to your arguments.
introduction conclusion present
Your conclusion summarizes your viewpoints, providing closure to the essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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