The line chart below illustrates the amount of worldwide tourist arrivals in 5 countries from 1995 until 2010. Overall, all of the nations presented had seen the increase in that number.

The line chart below illustrates the amount of worldwide tourist arrivals in 5 countries from 1995 until 2010. Overall, all of the nations presented had seen the increase in that number.
The chart shows the number of international tourists from 1990 to 2023 in 5 countries.
Overall
, people who travelled abroad increased steadily until the Covid-19 pandemic came. There has been a twice reduction in the chart, occurred at about 2003 and 2009 respectively. The size of
decrease
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were
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much lower than in
2020's
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2020
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because 1.1 billion people stopped traveling during that period. Even though the figures for tourists jumped considerably after the pandemic, it was still lower than the peak.
However
, the number of travellers started going abroad actively, so the number of them is expected to grow
up
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rather than drop . In conclusion, it is important for industries in tourism to be aware that
such
incidents can happen unexpectedly.
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