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The graph below shows the percentage of households, grouped by poverty, on the basis of access to refrigerator, electricity and water in Ghana for the year 1991/1992 to 1998/1999. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of households, grouped by poverty, on the basis of access to refrigerator, electricity and water in Ghana for the year 1991/1992 to 1998/1999. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart compares data about the fraction of the families who were poor and lived in Ghana and had access to 3 various facilities in 2 different times namely, 1991/1992 and 1998/ 1999.
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, it was important that nonpoor families had good access to
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 items
instead
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 of others and had
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 trend;
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, people roughly have all elements other than
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Refrigerator
.
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 the graph, not por family have rising fashion in all categories owing to the fact that for
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refrigerator
 at the start, they reached 24 after that they amount 13 increased;
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73% in 1991/1992, had 12% jumped from 1192 to 1998. In
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addition for
 water the
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proportion
 in 1998/1999 was 80% and a tiny
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more than
 the prior time. The diagram demonstrates that in
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contrast
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 the nonpoor the others' portion
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either
 decreased or constant. Water, which was the main part that most populations had access
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poor
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 69%;
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,
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 poor scored 55 in the beginning,
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Refrigerator
 hit 11% for
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;
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,
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 figure declined to 7%, but for
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labelled
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