The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
-The bar chart shows the
rate
of divorced people by percentages in
Finland
and Sweden from 2011 to 2015. -The bar chart shows the average of divorced people in the two countries between 2011 to 2015, referring to the high
rate
of Sweden's divorced people compared with the
rate
in
Finland
which was less till 2014,
then
the rates changed and the
rate
in
Finland
became higher than Sweden
rate
. -The Swedish
rate
started in 2011 at over 40% and reached the maximum point in 2012 at 49%,
then
gradually decreased to 36% in 2015. -
On the other hand
,
Finland
’s
rate
started in 2011 at 36%,
then
declined in 2012 to 33%, not too far until increasing in 2013 to reach 40% overtaking the Swedish
rate
in 2015. -
Overall
, Swedish rates explained the downward trend,
while
Finland
explained the opposite during the period between 2011
till
Correct word choice
and
show examples
2015. Both countries’ divorce rates had some fluctuations.
however
,
Finland
initially
had a lower
rate
. -
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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