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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates
the
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information about the
Europen
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European
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 country and the use of
meat
 between the
year
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years
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 1979 and 2004 in it. It
also
 shows various forms of
meat
 like fish, lamb, beef and chicken,
along with
 their consumption in grams per person in a week. As far as
the
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fish and lamb
is
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 concerned, it has been noticed that in 1979 more
then
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than
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 50 grams of
fishes
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fish
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 were eaten by individuals in a week. Later from 1984 to 2004 a slow decline was noticed which reached
to
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50 grams.
However
,
consuming
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the consumption
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 of
lamb's
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lamb
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meat
 was
highest
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 in 1979, which was around 150
g
 per person but soon there was a drop in its consumption which reached
to
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less
then
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than
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 100g.
Furthermore
, interest in beef was
also
 at its peak, which was more than 200g in 1997. But because of its fall off below 150
g
,
made
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it less popular between 1984 to 2004.
Therefore
,
the
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chicken consumption was low in 1979 but more and more interest towards
chicken's
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chicken
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meat
 was found in the
Europen
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European
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 country in the later years, in which it climbed up to 250g in a week in 2004.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meat, g with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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