Some people believe that governments should have access to people’s mobile phone call records and messages for safety reasons. Others believe that this information is private and should not be available without permission. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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phones
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by
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administration
argumments
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affect
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this information
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assists
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in catching
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works
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the city
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had stolen his ID card and Remove the comma
apply
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card. Correct your spelling
Insurance
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a report
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to
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the police
a police
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approximately
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him.
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argue that Correct your spelling
country
and contain
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containing
these information
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this information
data
private and non Use synonyms
avialable
. Correct your spelling
available
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non available
in any administration government to protect them". That Add a hyphen
non-available
mean
a lot of communities suffer from breakthrough their accounts.
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means
these
information is private. Change the determiner
this
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, the Correct your spelling
However
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government
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the responibility
responibility
to Correct your spelling
responsibility
konw
the accounts of Correct your spelling
know
person
to obtain Fix the agreement mistake
people
the
safety in all fields. Correct article usage
apply
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be aware
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government's
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