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The table shows the average time and money spent at different types of restaurants. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting in the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the average time and money spent at different types of restaurants. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting in the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts the information
of
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average
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 budget and quantity visited to three particular restaurants in
Vancouver
.
Overall
, it is evident that people dominantly spend time and money
to
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Vancouver
 Georgia
Street
 and
chicken
 is the most favorite dish in all of the restaurants. Regarding
to
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the quantity of
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the transaction
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transaction
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transactions
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, there is 854 transactions have been done in
the
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Vancouver
 Georgia
Street
 and it
totally
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 costs
$
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10.69, making it
the
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 top position among
others
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 restaurants.
While
the
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Vancouver
 Dunsmuir
Street
 has 750 transactions with $5.61
of
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 value total,
the
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Vancouver
 Drake
Street
 has the least quantity
transaction
, accounting for only 390, with
total
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a total
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 cost of $9.02. Moving to the next data,
the
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Vancouver
 Georgia
Street
 has
similar
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a similar
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 number of dining
transaction
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transactions
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, amounting to 405 and 449 for eat-in and
take away
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takeaway
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, respectively, and
chicken
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the chicken
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 burger is the most popular food there.
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,
the
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Vancouver
 Dunsmuir
Street
also
 has
alike
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a similar
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 amount for its eating
transaction
, 358 and 392 for dine-in and take-out orders, respectively, with
chicken
 wings as the well-liked dish there. On the other side,
the
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Vancouver
 Drake
Street
 has only 200 eat-in orders and 190 take-away orders.
Moreover
,
chicken
 pasta is the most
favorable
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 there.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vancouver, street, chicken, transaction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The table provides data on
  • average time spent
  • fast-food restaurants
  • diners
  • cafés
  • fine dining establishments
  • average cost per person
  • dining experience
  • comparisons
  • relevant
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