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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The tables provide financial
datas
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data
 about two products
are
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labelled as fairtrade in five nations in 1999 and 2004.
Overall
, the amount of money gained from coffee
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development
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 from 1999 to 2004 in all of
countries
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the countries
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.
Additionally
, It is readily apparent that the UK has benefited the most from
two
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 products.
To begin
 with the first table, the UK
sole
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sold
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 1.5
million
euros
 in 1999.
However
,
this
 number rose significantly to 20
million
euros
 after 5 years.
Moreover
, Switzerland doubled its
sale
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sales
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 from 3 to 6
milliion
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million
euros
 at the frame time.
Furthermore
, the
figure
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of
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 Denmark and Switzerland increased slightly to 2 and 1.7
millions
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euros
 respectively. It is worth
nothing
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noting
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 that Sweden profited the least and raised from 0.8 to 1
million
euros
 during the observation times. Turning towards the second table, the UK still was a country, which earned profit the most from
banana
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bananas
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 from 15 to 47
million
euros
 after 5 years. Meanwhile, Switzerland and Denmark increased sharply about 5 times from 1999 to 2004.
In contrast
, Belgium and Sweden saw a decrease of 0.8 and 1.1 in the research times.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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